drunkensteins

I think the concept / narrative is really strong. I'm seeing these what look like kids drinking, and i see this bizzare kind of european art film figure in the back with this negative connotation. It's interesting. Also the rendering is strong, you have a sense of creating the figures. Great composition, especially in terms of the way you push the positive/negative space interaction, and have the figures leaving the border.

I think the use of very strong lines around the figures is flatting the deep space that could've potentially been created with such a well done rendition. If you can strategically tone those down. If you create more contrast close to the viewer, and less contrast further away you can really push that space.

Also... In terms of using color (and at the moment, i'm struggling a lot with color personally sooo i'm thinking a lot about it), and this is something that I harp on, buuuuut... Without repeating that color of the old man guy in the background elsewhere in the frame, it's not creating the kind of eye movement that you really could have given how good the composition is.